Sharing for The Sunday Muse #165:
it's the bad decision
offer me a ride; let the wheels spin
it's the wrong decision
there's a blacktop where we've been
We've sent the leaves to vortices, up within our spin
Trees still lean above us, tangling shadows in the wind
There's no road that holds us, errant in our tin
it's the bad decision
made with brevity and whim
it's the wrong decision
on the blacktop where we've been
-- Chrissa
This reads so well Chrissa — fluid and pedal to the meddle… ;)
ReplyDeleteWow I really love this poem Chrissa! A warning, a message, a song, and advice we may not have taken. An amazing response to the image my friend!!
ReplyDeleteBad decisions, wrong decisions, blacktop in the past. Haven't we all? Well penned!
ReplyDeleteThoughtful take Chrissa! An impending consequence keeps us smiling at the end. There is a tinge of humour, here!
ReplyDeleteHere!
All roads lead to Rome, just some roads may be bumpier than others! ;-)
ReplyDeleteI so love the repeated "on the blacktop where we've been." A very cool poem.
ReplyDeleteA whirligig from start to finish, a high contrast to the image prompt Nice one
ReplyDeleteHappy Sunday
Much💛love
Very imaginative use of rhyme, nicely paced. I love that last (chorus-like) stanza, and the feel of an inevitability to everything. The middle stanza seems like a lament, as well as a call and response to the first and last. Skillful and evocative writing. It's the bad decisions that we can't leave behind.
ReplyDeleteOn the road again ... with an edge. Brava, Chrissa.
ReplyDeleteLove the imagery. The flow sugggests to me how easy ad decisions are, even when they are wrong. 'There's no road that holds us, errant in our tin'
ReplyDeleteTangled shadows in the wind - hmm. No plain sailing in such weather? :-)
ReplyDeleteSometimes the bad decisions are the most fun, even if you end up paying, with interest, later. Been down that road a time or two.
ReplyDeleteYes, but the paved road is sooo boring.
ReplyDeleteFun read, Chrissa.
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Oh yes, all those decisions made in haste .... I enjoyed this ride.
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