Sharing with The Sunday Muse #195. Come and share!
When it blew out the candle,
It began to speak, voice low,
eyes dimmer than flame.
Jenn believed, once upon
a childhood (she's still there...
but it's waning), it inhaled fire.
Spines, tonight. Gears ladder
bones and metal and plastic,
all that lived, rungs to heaven.
Heaven is a level of space
where you can't breathe
so they used to send the dead.
When the flame goes,
it takes our memories with it.
But not bot files.
Maybe it believes
she'll sleep easier if bots
go breathless, too.
It continues murmuring
and she pretends she's hearing
a confession in a box
Like the song her mother
plays when the dark stretches
between signals
We can handle shocks.
She can handle the dark, the small
not-flame of its eyes.
-- chrissa
Who could look at this image and not see a Reaper Dragon? I like it.
ReplyDeleteI love the eerie and spooky feel this holds. The stanza about heaven is mesmerizing. A wonderful write my friend! Yes winter is here, and i wish my living room was not half gutted out for repairs. :-(( May your succulents be forgiving and your day have some hot chocolate in it.
ReplyDeleteThis conjured memories of my mother in her favorite chair with her seed catalogs in her lap, dreaming of Spring! (We have angry succulents in our kitchen too!)
ReplyDeleteChrissa! So many wonderful lines ... I can't believe where the photography took you. When the flame goes, so go our memories ... my favorite.
ReplyDeleteYour fourth stanza about heaven presents a very new concept to me. You made me stop a while thinking about this new stillness.
ReplyDeleteHappy Sunday
Much love...
Heaven a level of space to send the dead - wow- hopefully, there is transformation in that
ReplyDeletespace of light.
I so love where your mind goes (and mine, when I read your poems.) Love the heaven where they send the dead bodies. And, especially "the small not-flame of its eyes".
ReplyDelete"Heaven is a level of space / where you can't breathe / so they used to send the dead." That is all-time great.
ReplyDeleteI once had a job offer to go to Lake Jackson but decided not.
ReplyDeleteI like the transition device, segue ??, from episode to theory of getting to Heaven and what heaven is. I also liked "Jenn's" idea of the candle inhaling the flame. I think I'll remember that.
Like people are funny, so I probably wouldn't tell. Mrs. Jim told this morning that I "walked on water but didn't do so well with spilled coffee." She was told she was funny.
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It is an image that makes the mind wander as you have made the character in your poem wander. Nice parallel.
ReplyDelete"Heaven is a level of space
ReplyDeletewhere you can't breathe
so they used to send the dead."
What a witty poem, Chrissa! I love your notes as well.
I don't want to copy the same as in the former comment, but after all those years here on earth I never ever thought that way. The logic in it is killing me... haha, this will stay with me a long time.
ReplyDeleteLove your post in total!!
The poem has a never ending quality. Lovely to read.
ReplyDeletethis has a very "do androids dream of electric sheep?" feel to it. "Like the song her mother
ReplyDeleteplays when the dark stretches between signals"... between signals. i like that. enjoyed this very much, well done.